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Articles: Poetry | | The true Depth........... | |
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| Hei...
The third line in you poem "And the brightness of the moon is what I seek", unfolds that you want to get influenced by 'Sun' like people. Its good. But why don't You try to be 'Sun' rather than a 'Moon'..You can be a Sun by influencing others with your poems..All the best..
Good luck.
Labor and scientia,
Bhaskar
Posted by: Mr. Bhaskar Murthy Cheri At: 16, Dec 2002 4:42:05 AM IST
Its nice! sontaga rasara ekkadaina copy kottara(just joking)!!
Its really good and i hope many more from ur pen.
Posted by: Mr. Srinivas RN At: 7, Nov 2002 8:23:33 PM IST
Really "Depthness" is there in this poem. But I feel there is some lack of continuity.
Why is it so difficult
To make others see,
The truth that lies within us...
Is it wisdom, or glory
Is it fame, or wealth...
Answer is:: If at all it is wisdom, one can truly identify the true depths of the others.
Yes, in most of the cases,Glory, Fame , Wealth may sometimes cloud the vision of the people with proud screens.
Really good stuff in you. Do you know, one of my friends has given me a nickname"POD-Pacific Ocean Depth"?
Do post more. Awaiting them.
Posted by: Ms. Prasanthi Uppalapati At: 7, Nov 2002 5:32:10 PM IST
this is one more great poem by u.
I liked this very much than the earlier one. Infact this is one of the poems which i liked very much. I see some influence of E.E.CUMMINGS in ur poetry. i like his poetry very much.u first describe the dark shades, then hopes, then questionsand answers. but everytime ur poem goes from sadness towards hope, unlike mine who always go from happiness to sadness. i feel u r a realist.
in this poem, u answered very well for ur own questions.I was a bit confused with the last words of urpoem--)"the internal secret of soul unfolds only whom who strives to reach...."
whats that u meant about that reaching??where should one reach to know that soul???
did u ever try to know that secret?? i tried many times, and i think i found it, but not sure of myself.
i wish to see a poem by u regarding the feelings of a lonely heart. i think u can write it good. why dont u try???
Posted by: Viplove K At: 7, Nov 2002 12:35:48 PM IST
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