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| SWAPNAALA SAAGARAM LO
NUVVEY NAA LOKAMU
"Swapnaanni Sagaram tho polchi, aa "neevey" ni Lokam anesaare" This is not a match.
Jalakanya,MatsyaGandhi ante baagundedemo!
First stanza last 3 lines chappagaa unnaayi.
LAILAA VI NEEVEY AYITHEY
MAJNU NI NENEY KAANAA?
I feel this is also not apt. yendukante, tanu lailaa ayinaa kaakapoyinaa meeru Majnu kadaa. aame lailaa ayithe nenu majnu avutaanu anadam anta effective gaa ledu.
AAA ALAVI NEEVEY AYITHEY
NEE GAMYAM NENEY KAANAA??
The above comment applies to these lines also. ala meeru. aame gamyam kaavaalani aasistunnaaru.
NAA AASELEY ADIYAASALAA?
This is reverse to the above mentioned lines which I quoted.
meeru aasistunnaaru kadaa. mari pai statements maaraali kadaa.
AA PAATALAA SAAGAALI LEY
POO BAATA LAA MAARALI LEY
This is Ok. Kaani
" MAAREYNAA MANA JEEVITHAM??" idemiti mallaa?
meeru completely confusion lo unnaaru.
aasa,niraasalaa oogisalaata laagaa.
kaabatti mee kavitha hrudayaanni taakaledu.
These are my frank comments.
Posted by: Ms. Prasanthi Uppalapati At: 23, Nov 2002 8:49:28 AM IST
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