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| mee asaMtRupti ippuDu naaku ardhaM avutOMdi... i can feel ur emotions now...
Very nice poem... keep it up.
Posted by: Subrahmanyam Mula At: 25, Feb 2005 7:57:52 PM IST
Sree lekha gaaru...kiraN gaaru anna maaTalanae naenu repeat chaestaa. vetiki vetiki chadavaalanukunna kavitalloa mee kavitalu okaTi. mee kavitaloa manchi depth undi.ayitae meeru raasae ee particular kavita style baagundi. ilaanTi bhaashaa prayoagamtoa chaalaa kavitalu vachchaayi. cheppalsina vishayam sooTigaa unDadu. ennoa upamaanaalatoa muginchaesi...paaTakuDi manasuloa chivariga kalagaalsina feelng ledaa anubhooti kaligaelaa chebtaaru. baagundi mee prayatnam kooDaa!..'Savaalanni okachoaTa chaeri batuku meeda nirNayam teesukunnaTTu' chaala baagaa vachchindi expression . naa observation prakaaramu...'Savam' anae padam kavitalloaa vaaduka bahu takkuva. adae observation prakaaram chaala manchi orientation una kavulu maatramae mohamaaTam laekunDaa vaaDaaru
aa padaanni. naadoa suggestion ....oka book release chaeyanDi. seeriyas gaa cheptunna. jok kaadu.inkaa konni kavitalu ilaanae panDinchi.....achchaeyinchanDi. actually it wont cost u much !. but it will be gud effort . 'amma vachchi veLLindi''chooDavae priyaa''siggu dontaralu' etc. chadivaanu. mee laaga mee anta powerfulgaa expression ivvaali ani target peTTukunnaa. wish me all the best . :))...
kaakapotae ee kavitalo naa observations /vimarshalu konni unnaayi.
'digantaalaku egirae korika unna rekkalloa daachukunae tyaaga dhanam '.....pai vaakyamloa ' aaDatanam ' nu anta nispruhagaa cheppi...'tyaaga dhanam ' ani anta goppagaa cheppaDam aedoa sudden swift expression laa anipistundi. carefulgaa chooDagalaru. modaTi anni khandikalloa... dissatisfaction baaga spashtamautundi. chaala inconvenientgaa anipinchae dissatisfaction baaga telisipoyaelaa express chaesaaru. ayitae chivari stanzaloa 'inta saukumaaryamu sunnitatvamu ' ani end chaesaaru. adaenTi..'Savaalanni teesukunae nirNayam laanTi aloachanalatoa ' unna ' dissatisafction saukumaaryam sunnitatvam daggara end ayyindi? aa chivari stanza adae tone nilupukoalaekapoyindi ani naa abhipraayam. perhaps ika daenni criticise chaestoo end chaeyaalanae spashTamaina aaloachana laeni crisis kaavachchu. naa inkoa suggestion aemanTae......vishayaanni anubhootigaa nilupukuni meeru kavita raastunnaaru...adhyayanam chaesi raayaDaaniki prayatninchanDi...chivari stanza loa meeru baddalu koTTukunna ending enta sulabha taram avutundoa?... try chaeyanDi... mee kavitaloa...urumulu meruplulae ika!...jallulu unDavu.
Posted by: Mr. Aandhrudu At: 28, Nov 2004 2:45:02 AM IST
Savaanni Bhujaanna vEsukuni prayatninchina
paTTu vadalani BhaTTi vikramaarkuDilaa
pada padavOY munmunduku
PhalistaayOy nI prayatnaalu.
ani maa ammamma chinnappuDu
naaku cheppinaTTu gurtu. :))))
Posted by: Mr. Siri Siri At: 30, Oct 2004 6:47:10 PM IST
kanipinchani aa naDipinchEvaadu
nIku sukumaaryaanni ichchindi
nIrasinchipOTaaniki kaadOY
lowkyamtO lokamlO gelavaDaaniki!
Posted by: Mr. Siri Siri At: 30, Oct 2004 6:28:28 PM IST
dOva nichchalangaa nilichi
ninnE aahvaanistOndi..
venuchUDaka pada padamunduku
ani nI vennu taDutOndi
Posted by: Mr. Siri Siri At: 30, Oct 2004 6:22:05 PM IST
saahasaanni chUpalEka
aadatanaanni ananEla?
vihamgamlaa eguralEka
tyaagaguNam chaaTuna daaganEla?
Posted by: Mr. Siri Siri At: 30, Oct 2004 6:15:48 PM IST
andarikI velugunu panchi
niduristunna aa jyOti mOmuna
saMtrupti tO ninDina
aa chirunavvunu chooDavEla?
Posted by: Mr. Siri Siri At: 30, Oct 2004 6:03:18 PM IST
wah....em chepparandi....2nd stanza super.....
TulasiMohan
Posted by: Mrs. Lakshmi Tulasi Ramineni At: 27, Oct 2004 1:46:56 AM IST
trOva eppuDU saagipOtunE uMdi
Opika lEnappuDE naDaka aagipOtuMdi
chaalaa chaalaa lOtulunnaayi ee vaakyaM lO... ippuDu chaduvutunTe telustOMdi.idi goppa kavitva lakshaNaM..
meeru velibuchchina abhipraayaalatO maatraM
nEnu EkeebhaviMchalEnu...:(
Posted by: Subrahmanyam Mula At: 24, Oct 2004 2:44:09 PM IST
Good one Lekha gaaru, 1,2 and 4 stanzas are too good :)
Posted by: Sreedhar G At: 16, Oct 2004 3:06:40 AM IST
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