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| wow beautiful....naaku yenduko chala nachindi sridhargaru......keep posting
Posted by: Mrs. kalyani thota At: 5, Nov 2004 9:53:04 PM IST
tappakunDaa subbu.. abstractness mukhyam kavitaki.. alaagE prayatnistaanu.. it makes lot difference changing the whole 4th para with single line and gives beauty to the verse..
chaalaa santOsham andhruDu gaaru.. nEnu konni reasons pointout chEddaamanukunna kaani vaaTilo mukhyam aham anipinchi adE cheppaanu
anyway your ideas are worth considering.. thank you so much.
Thanks to one and all for your comments :)
Posted by: Sreedhar G At: 3, Nov 2004 3:20:12 PM IST
mama chala bagunnadi alage continueeeeeeeeee
Posted by: venkat suresh chowdary At: 3, Nov 2004 3:12:34 PM IST
Srrrrrreeeeeeeee,
Just reality cheparu..... gudone, will read your other poems also........
Posted by: Ms. Saritharani K At: 3, Nov 2004 3:07:04 PM IST
mee Gutti Konda bilam kavitaku ee kavitaku chaalaa difference undi....
Posted by: Mr. Aandhrudu At: 3, Nov 2004 2:38:06 PM IST
mula subramanyam gaaridi very constructive suggestion...!...Sridhar manishi maelukO! anna TaiTil....gurinchi naadO chinna alOchana!..manishi melukO anTe inkaa ee fact teleedanaa?...telisinaa unDaDam ledaa? leka unDalekapotunnaaDanaa?..anTe kevalam aham ane bhaavam vallane freega unDaDam chaeta kaavaDam ledanukunkommanaa? inkaa expression differentgaa unDaalsina avasaram undi ani naa abhipraayam!...alaa kaakundaa...manishi svechchaku personality factors ku muDi peTTakunDaa social aspect lo svaechcha enduku ledO maaTlaaDi unTae baagunDaedaemO?....endukanTe general gaa manishi svechchane korukunTaaDu kadaa mari?....adi vyaktigatangaaa gaani saanghikangaa gaani...
Posted by: Mr. Aandhrudu At: 3, Nov 2004 2:35:34 PM IST
prakRuti lO aatma viSvaasaanni darSistU meeru raasina kavita baavuMdi.. aitE meeru sahRudayaM tO sveekaristaarani aaSistU naaku tOchina konni sUchanalu...
prakRuti ni keertistE sUchanapraayaM gaa manishi
alpatvaanni ettichUpinaTTE...aMdukani aaKari KaMDika tolagiMchinaa kavita ardhaM lO vachchE maarpEmee lEdu. kavita lO Redundancy , vivaraNa uMDakUDadu.
3 KaMDikala tarvaata 'mari nEnO?' anna okka vaakyaM
chEristE saripOtuMdanipiMchiMdi.
SilpaM meeda mari kaasta Sraddha peTTaMDi.
Keep writing.
Posted by: Subrahmanyam Mula At: 3, Nov 2004 11:05:23 AM IST
Awesome......
asUyalu,anavasarapuvaaTiki comparisons vunnanta kaalam....manishi antE.... mIru mee thought ni express chEsina vidhaanam chaalaa lively gaa vundi....
TulasiMohan
Posted by: Mrs. Lakshmi Tulasi Ramineni At: 2, Nov 2004 10:45:23 PM IST
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