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| As far as i am concerned with Lajja. It is neither a fiction nor a novel. Its a sort of research & transactional analysis of psyches. this is my personal opinion. and opnions do differ.
u r getting diverted by venturing into the constitutions of the countries and the likes. i never said Bangladesh is secular. I have used that for you to write a story abt the secular feeling in a non-secular country.
i can't write full length stories n essays. its not my strength. having patience and being analytical wud yield great results. now, as u came to know them, attempt to write a story on the lines told by me.
gud luck
Posted by: Mr. Vastav Alok At: 9, May 2005 9:58:48 PM IST
hello alok,
i can't say tht there was no discrimination during bangla war.
if we go by lajja, there was.....infact,horribly.
history books sometimes may not present facts completely. i feel one should read other books of tht time to understand history apart frm history books.
in lajja, the lead family's father faces that horribly in 70's and the son & daughter faces the same in 90's during babri masjid times.
yes, the friendship b/w hindu-muslim can also exist. why can't it? yes, it can be a counter lajja.
may be u'll say lajja is just a bit of fiction. which it is not...coz, all through lajja, u can find the facts well presented. i ned not say this..coz, facts & news reports come in more pages than fiction there!
regarding ur history, thts where hypocrisy of people shows...they do evrything and say..stay united! just giving a voice and not doing anything in reality. also, one mujibur is good..but, a 100 chauvinists too exist. ur history may not say that. because, sometimes, it covers those facts. the way treament of prisoners at abu ghraib and gautenama(don't know the spelling), the way happenings at hitler's concentration camps are hidden. hope u got the point.
yes, a story with the plot u have mentioned will be an excellent one. why not write one?
emandi, bangladesh lo hindu-muslim discriminatin ledu ani meeru bangla constitution lo statement untundey-secular, free to take any religion anna maatalu batti cheputunnaaraa? constitutionslu alaagey raasukuntaaru.
mari mana india sangatenti?
thank u soorya gaaru for pointing out tht blunder.
s.
Posted by: Ms. Sowmya V.B. At: 9, May 2005 6:12:27 PM IST
amaar soanaar banglaa ani umDaali. amaar aMTae naa yokka ani beMgaalee ardham..
Posted by: Mr. Surya Pudipeddi At: 9, May 2005 3:53:20 PM IST
dear dear dear,
did my comments feel like cuastic soda? oops. what i can say for this?
i feel your story's background is off-beat. during bangladesh war there was no descrimination of hindu & muslim. Gen. Tikka Khan's ruthless army butchered several Bangladeshi army personnel. It was one major by name Mujibur who killed his Pakistani commander and captured Chittagang. He then announced via Chittagang radio station that 'Mukti Bahini' is on its way and requested every single citizen of Bagladesh to stand up against Pakistani tyranny. This is what my readings abt bangladesh say. Correct me if I am wrong.
if i purely go by this history, your setting of story background is entirely wrong. Fiction doesn't mean that u completely ignore real facts. had u been little patient to study this piece of history, u cud hv written a beatiful story. A story, where a bangla muslim boy and a bagla hindu boy, together, dared the adversities of an impending war. it wud hv been a counter 'Lajja' which wud hv projected the secular feelings of boys who are way off from muddy politics.
abt my personal feelings with regard to ur talents, check your inbox.
Posted by: Mr. Vastav Alok At: 9, May 2005 1:58:28 PM IST
yes, mr sravan, the story line is same...but the presentation is different.
the characters of lajja till the end remain confident tht we'll stay in bangla.
these characters are a bit more timid.
anyways, i do agree tht i was a bit too excited in replying to vasstav alok's comments.
since i din't experience the trauma of those days, may be tht i can't write freely and may be it loked like an imitation.
actually, the story was written in a creative writing competition organised at my college for the topic-
'okka raatri nidranu bahishkarinchaalani nirnayinchukunnaayi kanureppalanni'.
this does not have releavnce here, but jus felt like saying.
i was too excited at Mr Vaastav Alok's comments coz of his pessimism adn causticity in commenting others. tht can be noticed if u see the comments he write for others......not me!
anyways, thank u.
Posted by: Ms. Sowmya V.B. At: 9, May 2005 10:11:36 AM IST
Hi,
I agree with Mr.Vastav Alok and by 'Agree' i mean i stand by him for each and every word of his.I just don't understand why you made such a lot of fuss about his comment.
For your kind information Mr.Alok's comments have nothing to do with 'Fine Balance','City of Joy','A Time to be Happy' etc.. being imitations of each other(which obviously are not).The issue here is not the theme of the story but the way it is being presented.The incident that you have described in your story is very very similar to the situations encountered by the protagaonist in 'Lajja'.This obviously is 'Plagiarism' and definitely not what you called 'Inspiration'.In trying to demarcate between Imitation and Inspiration i am sorry to say you ended up with a clumsy Translation of 'Lajja'.I have read 'Lajja' and all the other novels you mentioned in your post and i strongly feel that you need to re-read the novel and others if possible.
This comment is in no way meant to demoralise you or to offend you it just comes out of my love and appreciation for the original novel.I have read some of your other articles to be frank some of them are really good.
Dont lose your flair to write just because of some mistakes that you have commited in this article.
Hoping to see lotsa lotsa good articles from you.
Bye
P.S:One last suggestion try to be more 'Sportive'
Posted by: Mr. Sravan Sravan At: 9, May 2005 3:27:53 AM IST
hello
its a pity you can't demarcate between imitation & inspiration.
it is empathy that is common to such kind of issue based stories or issues.
one gets almost the same feeling after reading such issue based ones.
if u say it was an imitation of lajja, then, u must be saying tht-city of joy(dominique lapierre-on kolkata slums), a fine balance(rohinton mistry-emergency times), azaadi(chaman nahal-partition),pervez(meher pestonji-1992 riots),untouchable(mulk raj anand-untouchability),a time to be happy(nayantaara sehgal-post1947 life), etc etc etc should be the imitations of each other,don't know which was written first....let me tell u-i am not saying all these names to show tht i read all these. its just to make u understand tht the way they influence the mind is similar with all thse.
if i had really imitated Nasreen, then i should be feeling honoured. may be u r imagining since i said that i was inspired by lajja, tht i copied the story..tht shows u din't read it. but, since i din't live with the life as they did and research as they did, and since mine was only an expression of empathy, may be it is not efective..but, certainly not an imitation...and
i mentioned the name in the end coz, i need to! i don't want to give a false impression. also, if not for tht book, i would have never understood tht aspect.
after all this, if u still prefer to say it-an imitation, then, i can say one thing-one is not born with a style of ones own...at least not ordinary humans! pepople learn frm imitation....and finally, with this final sentence, don't imagine tht i am accepting ur accusation...i am only trying to correcting ur view abt imitation!! i still say..this is not an imitation. this is inspired by lajja. and u can easily see the differences in the mindset of the lead in lajja and here had u read it.
Posted by: Ms. Sowmya V.B. At: 7, May 2005 8:47:48 PM IST
this is really short (circuit) story. my suggestion to u is to stop imitating others. even if u r doing it don't quote that u r doing so. inspiration is different from imitation. try to fall under first category. u can ask how n why?
inspiration wud make u to write something different. imitation makes u to write a meak and cheap version of original. got my point.
u hv got ability to write on ur own. don't waste that by imitating others' works
Posted by: Mr. Vastav Alok At: 7, May 2005 3:06:18 PM IST
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