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Articles: Poetry | | hRudaya bhaasha | |
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| sorry no offence meant anDi.
Posted by: Mr. Aandhrudu At: 14, Jun 2005 6:21:08 PM IST
chooDanDi...hRudaya tantrulu..ee prayoagam ikaa vaaDakunTae baavuNNu.
pasiloakam loa viharinchaDam aenTanDi?...moosuku poayina dvaaraalu terichi anTae aedo udvaegam undanukunTaamu. kaanee saDan gaa pasi loakam anaDam kudaralaedu. paigaa artham aemee sphurinchadu.
maaTala mantra nagariki poavaDam varaiTeegaa anipinchinaa..maLLee maaTalatoa mauna prapanchaanni baddalu koTTaDm oka vairudhyam.
manishini jayinchaalsindi moasam toa kaadu maaTalatoa? ...ilaa....
aloachinchanDi...kavi maaTlaDae maaTalloa machyooriTee avasaram
Posted by: Mr. Aandhrudu At: 14, Jun 2005 6:16:31 PM IST
chaalaa machyooriTee kaavaali ! avagaahanaloanae asambaddata undi !
Posted by: Mr. Aandhrudu At: 14, Jun 2005 6:04:29 PM IST
TaiTiluki kanTenTuki linku kudarDam lEdu
hRudayabhAsheppuDU maunamE.mIkokkariki mAtramE vinipinchEdi.
A chivarlO 'mOsa'mendukochchindi?maunAniki mOsAniki yEviTi sambandham?
mATTADDamE nEramaina chOTa
marinta pandunekkutundi mATa
mOsAniki musugulA
maunam vunnappuDu
dAnni baddalu koTTAlsindE
manishini jayinchEdi
manasu
illA rAyochchu
Posted by: Mr. Vastav Alok At: 14, Jun 2005 1:59:16 PM IST
First six lines are ok. The word 'maaTa' repeated many times. Though repetition can be used, the way it is used here is not apt. Except the first 6 lines, the remaining is not poetic too. Try to refine.
Posted by: Ms. Prasanthi Uppalapati At: 14, Jun 2005 1:33:41 PM IST
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