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Articles: Poetry | | maguva chekkili taakina maga pedavulu | |
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| probably u miss the undelrying thread...boy u seriously think or learn something called "shilpam" in poetry :)
Posted by: Saleem At: 22, Apr 2003 12:17:43 PM IST
Thank u, for thinking about my poem so seriously.
actually, first when was writing it, i too wanted to write the same way.
But i thought of a new way to touch the hearts of readers. Everyline u added , "chebuthunaayi....." is what i wanted the reader to feel himself than just reading and forgettin what it is.
Guess??if i had written those lines , u might have forgotten the poem then itslef. Beacause, i let the readers free to think about what could be the relations of these lines, they can t hink a bit that how women are making their lives and if they think it by themselves they will get the memories by themself and fly with sweetmemories.
All this kinda things came to mind, when i watched some foreign award movies, which left many things for viewers discretion and thus successfully made my heart respond.
And i like when anyone changes my works, 'cos i like change.
Posted by: Viplove K At: 12, Apr 2003 5:24:23 PM IST
kavita peru ki and kavita ki sambhandam entaina avasaram, and i am not convinced with your explanation. Anduke undabattaleka konni lines add chesaanu. atleast mee bhavana teesuku vaddamani, but even though enduko nenu add chesindi kooda naaku nachaledu. anyway thanx for ur explanation. Here the poem with new lines.
talli jolapaataku saddumanigina pasi rodanalu
Cheptunnai talli anuraaganiki minchindi ledani...
akka chethi mottikaayalu ruchi choosina tammulla talalu
Cheptunnai akka aatmeyatiki avi nidarshanalani...
chelli vekkirimpulaku annala alakalu
Cheptunnai chelli anubhandaniki avi niluvutaddalani...
preminchina maguva chekkili taakina maga pedavulu...
Cheptunnai priyasakhi premaki avi anavallani
Manasu lo pongi poralu tunna anandaalu...
Cheptunnai adviteeyamaina aadavaari premaku sari saati ledani...
Viplove gaaru inko vishayam, mee permission lekunda mee poem ni marchinanduku very sorry.
Posted by: Sreedhar G At: 12, Apr 2003 0:53:42 AM IST
I am emphasising how intimate a man's life is related with woman.
1st and 3rd lines show the relation between the feelings of man with woman's.
2nd and final lines tell about how lovely senses{sense of touch by love} he has with women.
Everyone is asking me the relation between four. I meant to say all those are most lovable memories in a man's life, thats the only relation.
I am comparing all those as one, thats it.
Posted by: Viplove K At: 11, Apr 2003 6:19:28 PM IST
I am confused now, why all the ppl are questioning the relation between the lines i mentioned.
It makes me feel bad that i had to explain poetry.I dont think i wrote this so complexly.
I expect readers to read this without intending to find any complex meaning.
I remember of one saying, "while observing each and every tree and its leaves, one may forget the truth he has been in a forest"
So is the case with this poem
Posted by: Viplove K At: 11, Apr 2003 6:15:46 PM IST
Viplove,
Padalu bagunnavi kaani, meeru cheppadaluchukunnadi matram artham kaledu.
konchem clarify chestaara please ?
Thanx,
Sreedhar
Posted by: Sreedhar G At: 11, Apr 2003 0:51:25 AM IST
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