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| kavita gaaroo ,
sTOree baagundi anDi. chaalaa rOjulu ayindi mee aarTikil chadivi. appaTikee ippaTikee meeru raasE vidhaanam lO mechyooriTee vachchinaTlu anipistundi. keep going. andulOni viShayam gurinchi cheppaalanTE .... nijamEnanDi .. annee mana chEtullO unDavu kadaa .....
Posted by: Ms. Sowmya V.B. At: 22, Feb 2006 9:44:44 PM IST
Thanks Kavita for clarifying few things. May be I should have read the story few times before I wrote the comments. I understand that it is not always possible to act the way we want. But, I beg to disagree in this situation.
Do we know Navina's age/background? I should read it again. Navina might be giving strength to her mother. With that kind of personality, she must have gotten in trouble several times before and it is not mentioned. If it was mentioned and how she reacted to it, may be the story would have had some weight to it on how her behavior changes depending on situation.
I am sorry Kavita, I have seen characters like Navina around me before and that is why I am able to write. Also, Navina's mother lying and it is okay? Seems like artificial. Ahy could she not say that the girl is in Dubai? How does it matter? Does it matter if she tells the truth? Is she afraid that the Court will order Navina to come back? What is she afraid of? If the court really wanted Navina to come back and give a stand, it does not matter whether she is in Dubai, or in Canada, or as a matter of fact,anywhere.
This is just my two cents worth of analysis. Again, thanks for taking time to responding. Don't think too seriously about this. I responded because I know you. That's all.
Take care,
Madhurima
Posted by: Mrs. Madhurima Vangipuram At: 17, Feb 2006 10:01:34 PM IST
Hello Madhurima garu,
Thanks for your comments. Constructive criticism is always welcome which helps any writer to write better.
Navina is definately daring in the story
1. she wanted to call the police in the dead of the night but was stopped by her mother and neighbors.
2. She was the one who called police in the morning and narrated what she has seen.
3. She was bold enough not to care abt others and went to office and was also giving lot of strength to her mother.
But everytime a person cannot have all the things under his/her control. This is what exactly happened in this story. Though Navina is daring she cannot do whatever she wants(she respects her moms word too!)What else can be expected out of a girl who is just 20-23 yrs old.
What the author wanted to convey thru' this story is that social conciousness may not always give the intended results at all the times.
Kavita
Posted by: Mrs. kavita ganduri At: 17, Feb 2006 9:34:02 PM IST
Kavita,
This is Madhurima. It has been a long time since I read a short story or even something written in telugu. I read the entire story. Do you want to know my honsest opinion? Please consider this as constructive critisism. I hope you won't get discouraged by my comments.
I thought even though this is the norm among our people (not to interfere in affairs such as you described in the story), I felt that the story lacked depth. It rather was weak, at least in my opinion. Your character Navina who is daring and dahsing and etc WILL NOT compromise for anything. The personality of daring, and dashing is such. The qualities contradicts her behavior. It does not matter what her parents or society would think of her. She will be bound to do the right thing (at least what is right in her book).
I could write more, but, I will wait to see your response. I apopogize if I hurt you.
Madhurima
Posted by: Mrs. Madhurima Vangipuram At: 17, Feb 2006 5:41:27 AM IST
naa thoughts maatram diff madam......evariki ana manchi chedhaam anukunte we should be ready to face the troubles in between.....
ala face cheyalekha ettu conscience manalni padhe padhe prasnisthu unte adhi narakam tho samaanam.........
so bottom line enti ante ' mee situation ardham chesukogalamu'........coz nenu kooda mee type ye... :)
kaani attachments / commitments unte manam free ga evariki emi help cheyalemu chesina taravaatha endhuku chesaanu abba aney alochina raaka maanadhu..
attachments/commitments..lekunda regrets lekunda unna vaale nijam ga daring n dashing alanti vaalu lekha poledhu......
Posted by: chakri At: 16, Feb 2006 6:18:47 PM IST
Exactly my thoughts Prashanti. Anthe nandi Kavitha garu.
Posted by: Mrs. Kiranmayi P At: 16, Feb 2006 3:44:43 PM IST
chAlA bAguMdi navIna AvEdana. kAnI konni praSnalaku samAdhAnAlu uMDavu. aMtE.
Posted by: Ms. Prasanthi Uppalapati At: 15, Feb 2006 10:44:54 PM IST
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