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Articles: Poetry | | SNEHAM !! | |
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| hi sreedhar garu,
i appreciate the punching last lines of ure sonnet.those lines has given immense meaning to the whole sonnet than the above lines.
the meaning is not carried with much depth in begining of ure peom.but the end was too good.if the same depth was there in starting it would have added much value to it.this is just my opinion.
this was ure lines
"Kashtallo kaachedi
sukhallo vennanti undedi"
wht i suggest instead of these lines:
sukhallo toddu vundatanikhi boledu mandi vuntaru venta but kashtallo vennanti vunde vaade snehitudu anni na abhiprayam andi.
so i felt the above lines can be changed this way.
"kashtallo vennanti undi vuratta nichedi
sukhallo anandanni divighuni krutam chesedi"
sneham gurchi chakkagha chepparu.
Posted by: Ms. silpa nugula At: 3, Jun 2003 3:04:25 PM IST
"chejikkinchu kolevoyi sirulenni vechchinchina ee sneham".
ee line adbhuthangaa vundhi.....chaduvuthuntey manchi feeling vachindhi....
good one
Posted by: Mrs. Lakshmi Tulasi Ramineni At: 29, May 2003 5:09:58 PM IST
chejikkinchu kolevoyi sirulenni vechchinchina ee sneham
-I like this...Keep going on :-)..
Posted by: Suresh At: 29, May 2003 12:10:01 PM IST
mama sneham gurinchi baga cheppavu kani...
nenu okati cheppana...
"chejaara neekoyi nee ee snham" annavu kadha...
asalu ala "chejaarithe adi sneham kadu" anukuntunna nenu...
idi just my view of friendship...don't take it personally....
hope you will come with many more this kind of kavithalu....
Posted by: Rajesh At: 29, May 2003 0:27:52 AM IST
mamulu ga evo padalu cheppinattundi..depth ledu :)
Posted by: Saleem At: 28, May 2003 11:31:37 PM IST
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