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| kaamESvara raavu gaaritO pUrtigaa Ekeebhavistaanu. aayana cheppindi chaalaa nijaM. ilaanTi kavitallO poetic expressions vetakaDaM tappu. udaaharaNaki ismaayil kindi kavita antaa saadaa seedaa vaakyaallOnE undi. kaanee idi goppa kavita. nishi gaaru meeru mee maarpula gurinchi mari konnaaLLaagi aalOchinchanDi. tondara paDakanDi.
pagalantA prayANaM chEsi
pradOsha vELa oka chOTa chEraaM
cheTla neeDaltO cheruvu
cheTla neeDana guDiSa
pakkanE oka maDichekkaa
paina akaaSaM
inta saraLata saadhinchaalanTE
enni janmalettaalO?
Posted by: Subrahmanyam Mula At: 13, Oct 2006 11:18:57 PM IST
baavundi nishee (aedO ardhamayinaTTu) ;)
vachchina chuTTaalandarikee naa vandanaalu. :)
Posted by: Mr. Yama Kinkarudu At: 13, Oct 2006 9:11:37 PM IST
nishigAru, I mArpulu nAku nachchalEdaMDI. E gati rachiyiMchirEni samakaalamu vaaralu mechcharE kadaa:-)
mArpulu cheyyaka muMdu kavitE bAguMdi, okka 'vennellO gOrumuddalu' tappa.
mA AviDatO mATlADutunnaTlugA UhiMchukuMTE, A saMbhAshaNalO sahajaMgA 'nA, nI'lu vastAyi. aMchEta avilEkapOtE oka rakamaina AtmIyata koravaDinaTTugA anipistOMdi.
chivari pErAguriMchi subbUtO nEnEkIbhavistAnu. adi vAchAlata kAkapOvaDAniki kAraNaM mIrannaTTu, adi lEkapOvaDaM manasulOni nirASani sUchistuMdi. uMTE, maroka viMta anubhUtini migulustuMdi.
pratyEkiMchi poetic expressions vetikitE alATi vAkyAlu kanabaDavu. kAnI mottaM kavita manasuki hattukonE anubhUtini migulustOMdi. aMchEta idi kavitwamE, nA uddESaMlO alATidi goppa kavitwaM kUDA!
Posted by: Mr. Kameswara Rao Bh At: 13, Oct 2006 8:57:21 PM IST
Thanks SO much everyone for your feedback and SUGGESTIONS on the poem :)
inta manchi charchani sAginchinanduku vaastav gaariki, viSva gaariki, subbUki nA dhanyavAdAlu! :)
vinAyakam gAru, chAlA bAgA cheppAranDi.. baddiilE lEkapOtE daari eppuDu vEraipOtundO cheppalEmu kadA!!
modaTagA 'nA' 'nI' la daggaraku vastE... 'alakalu' , 'mandalimpulu', 'chivATlu' etc lAnTivi sAdhAraNamgA particular gender chEsE panulu kadaa ani vADAnu.. avi teesEsi raasi chUsukunTE maatram vAstav , kiraN , viSva gArlatO Ekiibhavinchaka tappaDam lEdu..
laasT 3 lain&s gurinchi.. kavitani optimistic gA pUrti chEyAlanE uddESyamtO raasina lain&s avi.. avi lEkunDA chadivitE oka bAdhA vIchika kanabaDutundi (nA uddESyamlO) .. kaanii, 'nAkEm bAdhEyaDamlEdu.. chitramgA!' lO 'chitramgA' anavasaramE!!
viSwa gAru cheppinaTlu 'chiru gOrumuddalu' assalu kudarani prayOgam .. :(
ika indulO kavitvamE lEdanE vAdaaniki nEnEmii mATlADalEnu.. kAnI vAstav gAru cheppinaTlu nEninkA chAlA edagAli, kavayitrigA!
sUchinchina mArpulu chEsina tarvAta...
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inta mArpu eppuDu vachchindanTAv !?
alakalu.. bujjagimpulu
allarlu.. mandalimpulu
vennellO gOrumuddalu.. dinDu pakkana sampengalu
okari chuTTU okaram ..
idE kadA nEnerigina
mana prapancham !!
mari ippuDu..
chivATlu.. sanjAyishiilu
kOpAlu.. nirAsaktatalu
adi nI pani.. idi nAkE telsu
okari pakkana okaram ..
railupaTTAllA
samaantaramgA epuDayyAmO
neekainaa gurtundA!?
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Posted by: Nishigandha At: 13, Oct 2006 7:40:01 PM IST
1.chAlA mArpulavasramani mIkanipiste sUchinchanDi.rachaitaku upayOgapaDtundi.
2.guDimeTlaku, railu paTTAlakU ATTE tEDAlEdu.yendukanTArA renDU guNa vAchakAllAnE upayOginchabaDDAyigAnI viSEshaNAlugA kAdu.mIru I vishayAnni gurtunchukOvAli.idi varaku cheppinaTTu guNa vAchakAlennaDU kavitaku hAni chEyavu.I dRushTi tO chUchinappuDu akkaDa meTla guNAnni, ikkaDa paTTAla guNAnni vADukODam jarigindi.vivaraNAtmakata vAchAlatvamE autundi.gAnI ikkaDa kavi vAchAlatvAnni pradarSinchi chivari sTAnjAlO mAtramE.I kavitalOni evolyUshan&lO brahmAstrAla gurinchi nEnu cheppitE hAsyAspadamaitE kAnivvanDi.nAku chintalEdu. yE daSalOnaina tappulu tappE ganaka diddi cheppaDam vimarSakuni kartavyam .ikkaDa nenu I kavitani rAyalEdu.iddaram vimarSa mAtramE jEstunnAm .lAjikku lEni vimarSa nirupayOgam .
3.uddESapUrvakangA chEsina tappulu kEvalam tappulu gAvu. vyabhichAram
kavi vAngnirmitam kAvyam annadAniki mIrichchE vivaraNa yEviTO telsukOgOrutunnAnu.kudirinchanDi
Posted by: Mr. Vastav Alok At: 13, Oct 2006 5:20:01 PM IST
vimarSala pErutO kavitani ilaa peeki paakaM paTTakUDadani naa abhipraayaM. vaastav gaaru cheppinaTTu kavitalO konni prose expressions unnanta maatraana adi kavitvaM kaadanaDaM tappu. alaagE kavitalO mirumiTlu golipE poetic expressions lEkapOyinanta maatraana kUDaa adi kavitvaM kaakunDaa pOdu. saadaa seedaa vaakyaallO goppa kavitvaM cheppina kavulentamandO unnaaru.
Posted by: Subrahmanyam Mula At: 13, Oct 2006 5:05:15 PM IST
viSwagAru kavitalO konni mArpulu cheyyAlsi vochchinanta mAtrAnA adi kavitvam kAkanDApOdu.idi modaTi tarkam .
okari pakkana okaram , railupaTTAlu gurinchi vostE. raghOttama rAvu gAru iTIvalE rAsina kavitalO guDi meTla gurinchi cheputU 'pAdAlanu sAdarangA AhvAnistU' ani rAsAru.guDi meTlu pai janam pAdAlu kAka arichEtulu peDatArA? akkaDa adi atikinappuDu ikkaDa idI atukutundi.vyaktulaki, vastuvulaki pOlikanu spashTangA cheppaDamlO tappulEdu. aite idi E kavikainA prAdhamika daSalOni sthiti mAtramE.niSi gAru edagAli.A evalyUshan lO bhAgangA vostunna I kavita pai brahmAstrAlani prayOginchAlsina pani lEdu. idi renDO tarkam .
prati sTAnjAlOnU anavasramaina padAlu, vyaktIkaraNalu lEvu.unnadallA yadhAtadham .vATilni poyeTik gA amarchE prayatnam jarigindi. andulO uddESapUrvakangA kAkanDA dorlina lOpAlu mAtramE nAku kanipistunnAy . idi mUDO tarkam .
kavi vAgnnirmitam kAvyam ani alankAra kaustubhakAruDu cheputunnADu.vAkku anTE yEviTi? nirmANamanTE yEviTi? vAngnirmitam anTE yEviTi? ani alOchistE indulO kavitvam vunnadi lEnidi bOdhapaDutundi
Posted by: Mr. Vastav Alok At: 13, Oct 2006 4:47:54 PM IST
indulO kavitvam lEdanE vishayamlO nEnu subramaNyam gAritO EkIbhavistAnu.indulO khachchitangA kavitvamundi.
nAvarakU chivari sTAnjA anavasaramEnanipistOndi.I kavitani kEvalam railupaTTAlu, strIpurushula kalahAlanna kONamlOnunDi mAtramE jUsi chivari sTAnjA avasaramani tIrmAninchaDam anta sababu kAdEmO.oka pAThakunigA I kavitanu chadUtunTE nA manasu spandana chivari sTAnjAki mundugAnE AgipOtOndi.antE kAdu chivari sTAnjA 'nAkEm bAdhEyaDam lEdu...chitrangA' anTU Ovar senTimenTAliTIni pradarSistOndi.anchAtE na dRushTilO adi anavasaram .iha nI, nAla gurinchi.avi khachchitangA vyarthAlE.avilEkapOyinA kavitakochchina pramAdAlEvI lEvu.vITini sajeshTu jEsina mAtrAna kavulu tama Sailini kOlpOtAranE ArOpaNa artharahitam .
kluptata anTE niDivi kAdannadi viSwagArikippaTikE telusunTundani nA abhiprayam.viSwA gAru prati khanDikalOnU kluptata lEdannAru.yenduku lEdu? kavitvamlO tarkam kUDadu gAnI vimarSalO adi chAla avasaram .ganaka viSwagAru inkoddigA tarkabaddhangA abhiprAyAlni vellaDinchAli
Posted by: Mr. Vastav Alok At: 13, Oct 2006 4:18:26 PM IST
ee kavitalO kavitvamE lEdanaDaM sari kaadu.
alaagE aaKari KanDika KachchitaMgaa avasaramE. . asalu aa KanDikE ee kavitaki balaannee, navyatanee techchipeTTindi. lEkapOtE railupaTTaalu, samaantara rEKala meeda ippaTikE chaalaa kavitalochchaayi. idi kUDaa vaaTi jaabitaalO chEripOyEdi. kaabaTTi adi KachchitaMgaa unDaali.
nee, naa ani unDaDaM valla nashTamEmiTO kUDaa ardhaM kaalEdu. vimarSakulu inta chinna vishayaalani paTTinchukOkUDadani naa uddESaM. alaa paTTinchukunTE ikkaDa kavulu tama sonta Sailini kOlpOyE pramaadaM undi.
ee kavitalO lOpaalEvainaa unnaayi anTE avi 'inta maarpu eppuDochchindanTaav ?' , ' idE kadaa nEnerigina prapanchaM', 'mari ippuDu', 'neekainaa gurtundaa?' modalaina prose expressions. avi teesEsi kavita okka saari chadavanDi.
Posted by: Subrahmanyam Mula At: 13, Oct 2006 3:10:36 PM IST
'railu paTTaallaa
samaamtaramgaa eppuDayyaamO
nIkeinaa gurtumdaa!? '
alakalu , bujjagimpula numDi kOpaalu,chivaaTlu, samjaayishIllOki tamakE telIkumDaa eppuDu
veLLipOyaamO anukuni aaScharyapaDutU aa xaNam eppuDO nIkeinaa gurtumdaa ani
aDigina paddatilO kavitvapu amSa umdi. aaScharyam , niraaSa, prEma, baadha imkaa bhaaryaa bhartalaki
sambamdhimchina anEka sahajameina sunnita bhaavOdvEgaalani okkapaaTuna spRuSistU hRudayaanni kadilimpachEsE
Sakti unna padaalavi....
Posted by: Mr. Krishna At: 13, Oct 2006 1:26:44 PM IST
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