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General Forum: Poetry | | kavitala pai vastunna vimarSalu nirmANAtmakaMgA vuMTunnAyA? | |
| peddamma gaaru ,
E rachanalainaa manassuni hattukunEdigaa unDaali , avi kavitvamaa , akavitvamaa ikkaDa evarikee avasaramlEdu. Ti.pi vaaru manaku free gaa vaaDukOvaDaniki telugu fanT ichchaaru , konta mandi teluguvaaLLani parichayam chEstunnaaru , vaarito manchitanamgaa unTuu naalugu kaalaala paaTu santOsham gaa kooDaa unDaneeyakunDaa " kavitvam " kaadani , tokka ani , tolu ani vaagaDam tappa inkaa Emi unDadu. kondaritE idi kavita kaadu vErE sekshan lO pOsTanDi annappuDu Sarma gaaru vipareetamgaa spandinchaaru asalu kavitanTE EmiTi elaa unDaali ani , aa rOju endarO kavula spandanalu vinipinchaayi.
taruvaata vimarSakulalO konta maarpuluu vachchaayi. maLLee idigO ee viSva gaari valla lEni rabasa praarambham ayindi.
arE .. meeku nachchakapOtE kaamenTs vraayakanDi. vraasEvaaLLu elaa feel avutE meeku enduku ? uddarinchaDaaniki kankaNaalu kaTTukochchaaru chuuDu adE baagalEdu.
alaa kaadu ilaa meeku Saastri gaaru chepputE , sambandhamlEnivi ikkaDa presenT chEstaaru. ee saiTlO unna kavulanu gurinchi Evainaa meelaa chESaaraa ? chEstE chuupinchanDi.
Posted by: లొట్టాస్ At: 13, Nov 2006 3:15:30 PM IST
aaj yooj val ee daaram kooDaa ekkaDO modalayyi ekkaDikO pOtOndi. :)))
kavitalapai vastunna vimarSalu nirmaaNaatmakaMgaa unTunnaayaa anna daaraMlO adi tappa anni Discashan lO ki vachchaayi. :p
vimarSa khachchitaMgaa avasaram. pratipakshaalu lEkunDaa kEvalam adhikaara pakshaanni oohinchukOgalamaa? adhikaara paksham saraina dOvalO naDavaalanTE pratipaksham unDaali. tana paatrani samardhavantaMgaa pOshinchaali. alaagE E rachanakainaa vimarSa avasaram. idivarakaTi pOsT lO cheppinaTTu rachayitakannaa vimarSakuDi aalOchanaa paridhi ekkuvagaa unDaali. rachayita oka chinna mukka raastE adi raayaDam venuka rachayita aalOchanalu kooDaa grahinchagalagaali. appuDE adi tappO, oppO cheppagalaru.
alaa kaakunDaa EdO chadivaam EdO vimarSistunnaam anTE daani valana upayOgam evarikee unDadu. okavELa aa rachayita appuDappuDE rachanalu chEstunnavaaraitE ee vimarSalaki jaDisi kalam paTTaka paaripOyE pramaadam kooDaa undi. daani valana saahitee rangaaniki, paaThaka lOkaaniki tappa inkevarikee E nashTam unDadu. :))))))
sO, sammaree EnTanTE vimarSa unDaali, ghaaTugaa ayinaa sunnitaMgaa ayinaa kaanee vimarSinchE mundu aa kavi sthaayi ni kaasta gurtunchukOvaali. peddavaaranO, goppa rachanalu chESaaranO kaadu. kavigaa vayasenta, intaku mundu chEsina rachanala sthaayiki taggaTTu undaa lEdaa ani maatramE. kavitaa vastuvu, Saili mukhyam kaanee kavi vayasu kaadEmO.
Posted by: లొట్టాస్ At: 13, Nov 2006 2:48:49 PM IST
// 4.5 kavitalu raasi vimarSakuDu anipinchukOvaali ....... //
idi artham lEni vaadana. aasvaadinchaTaaniki, vimarSinchaTaaniki artham chEsukOgaligitE chaalu. sinimaalO chiranjeevi baagaa chESaaDO lEdO ani cheppaalanTE mundu naTinchi aa tarvaatE aa maaTa anaali anTE adi asaadhyam.
Posted by: మోహన రాగం At: 13, Nov 2006 3:08:59 PM IST
Well Mr.Vishwa, strong comments always face the risk of being ignored unless the other person sees a point or two. The poets over here are amateurs and one does not expect them to take strong comments objectively.
Posted by: Malakpet Rowdy At: 13, Nov 2006 2:59:27 PM IST
Posted by: Viswa K At: 13, Nov 2006 2:38:24 PM IST
EdeitEnEm amdari manasulu dOchukumdi gadA nAyanA.idEmannA pOTInA lEka birudulistArA....amdarU mechchukumTe nIkishTamumDadA. A rachana / kavita amdarinI impres chEyagaligimdi anaDAniki imkA Em kAvAli. mAkkAvalisimdi adE..
Posted by: Mrs. Pedaraasi Peddamma At: 13, Nov 2006 2:56:26 PM IST
//vayasu tO panilEdu " kavitvam mukhyam //
meeku anOvasaram ayitE maaku avasaramE musugu manushulani evaruu lekkalokee teesukOru. Emundi oka musugulO tegapogiDi , inkOmusugulo vimarSaastraalu vEyaDam brahma vidyalu kaavu kadaa ? tamaru anTu oka kavita ee aiDeelOnE vraayanDi. vraaSaaka kaamenTlu chuuDanDi.meeru vimarsinchina kavulandaruu nidralEsi tamani vaaru kooDaa SaaluvaalO cheppu kanapaDakunDaa daasi sanmaanistaaru. kaavaalanTE chuuDanDi .vimarSakuDu evaDuu kavitalu vraayaDu.kaamenTlu maatramE pOstaaDu ani samardinchukOkanDi maLLee.
okaLLu vraasina kavitalani eDiT chEsi vraayaDam goppa kaadanukunTaa , nijamaina vimarSakuDu mundu kavitalu oka 4 , 5 vraasi chuupinchi vimarSakuDu ani pinchukOvaalani teleedaa ?
Posted by: లొట్టాస్ At: 13, Nov 2006 2:48:49 PM IST
But whats wrong in being lil more polite? There is no harm in toning down the intensity (without changing the intent) right?
If someone is offended due to some comment, (even though the comment is technically a correct one), Dont you think its better to rewrite the next comment in a different fashion?
Once again.. I am not saying that you should change a comment from "It's BAD" to "It's Good" ...
but changing something from "Its BULLSHIT" to "It can be improved a lot" would add more credibility.. Dont you think so?
Posted by: Malakpet Rowdy At: 13, Nov 2006 2:39:36 PM IST
Saastri gaari "rachana " maasapatrikalO vraasinadaanTlO E dOshamu lEdu.
aakharilO
//enabhayyilO paDutunna naalaanTi vaariki "rachana ' vanTi patrikalE konta saahitee sowrabhaalanu andistundanaDamlO ataSayOki kaadu , vyaktigata pogaDtalanu patrikalaku upayOginchavaddani 45 pEjeelu kEvalam vyaktigatamgaa chadavuTaku maa bOTivaalla chEta 20 roopaayalu peTTi konipinchaDam Emanna baagundaa ? ika mundu patrikallO rachayitalaku ekkuva prOtsaaham ivvaalsindigaa praardhinchaanu //
idi niajamgaa saahitee vEttalu , abhimaanulu telusukOvaalsindi , rachayitulani prOtsahinchakunDaa ala vyaktigata pogaDtalaki (45 pEjeelu )taavu ivvakanDi anEdi tappEmundi ? kaLaakaaruDi gurinchi 45 pEjeelu pogaDtalatO vraasinappuDu alaanTi pogaDtalu ivvakani cheppaDam hundaatanamgaanE lEduu ?
idi free saiT. Ti.pi DaaT kaam vaariki lEni paTTimpu viSva gaariki enduku ? free gaa vastunna saiT kaabaTTi eDiT cheyyaDamE panigaa peTTukuni tanani vyatirEkistunnaaranna uddESyamtO chandra gaari linku okaTi paTTukochchi ikkaDa pEsT chESaaru.
telugu jaateeya rachayatula sabha gurinchi maaTlaaDE arhata kooDaa viSva gaariki lEdEmO nanipistundi. paigaa Saastri gaarini tappupaTTaDamlO enta moorkhatvamO ardham avutundi. sonta Dabbaalu koTTukOkanDraa ! kaashTa rachayitalani kooDaa kavar cheyyanDani O peddamanishi aDigindaaniki , chinna kavulameeda peddavaaLLameedaa okE Taipu aaf burada chimme burada paamulalO kaLaatmakamaina dRushTi unTundi ani nEnu anukOnu.
Posted by: లొట్టాస్ At: 13, Nov 2006 2:29:26 PM IST
bAgumdirO pETa rauDI!
vimarSa amTe muKAmuKi kanapaDinA cheppagaligEvigA umDAli nAyanA.
alA edurugA chebite paLLu rAlagoTTe mATalu illA chATugA kUDA anakUDadu.
vimarSakuDiki O athAriTI / O hOdA kUDA muKyam.
nEnU bachchAgALLatO gachchAlADatAnu amTE ,tagaduro biDDA
umTA ammalU /baabulU peddayya vachchE vELayimdi.
Posted by: Mrs. Pedaraasi Peddamma At: 13, Nov 2006 2:13:01 PM IST
baadhallO kaashTa pEraDeelu uuraTa kaligistaayannadi ippuDE telisindi.
Posted by: లొట్టాస్ At: 13, Nov 2006 2:04:39 PM IST
suupar pEraDi :)
Posted by: లొట్టాస్ At: 13, Nov 2006 2:03:01 PM IST
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